Comments on: Every Time You Undress Me http://13neardeathexperiences.com/2009/03/every-time-you-undress-me/ Get well soon, Corey! Sun, 18 Apr 2010 12:57:21 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.8 hourly 1 By: Steven http://13neardeathexperiences.com/2009/03/every-time-you-undress-me/comment-page-1/#comment-145 Steven Sat, 21 Mar 2009 20:49:07 +0000 http://13neardeathexperiences.com/?p=246#comment-145 Great song, Corey! Again, I love the texture. What sort of obnoxious drum effect are you looking for? Just irritating or plain ridiculous? <b>Corey replies:</b> <i>Ridiculous, definitely! Why be irritating when you can be ridiculous? :)</i> Great song, Corey! Again, I love the texture. What sort of obnoxious drum effect are you looking for? Just irritating or plain ridiculous?

Corey replies: Ridiculous, definitely! Why be irritating when you can be ridiculous? :)

]]> By: David Wright http://13neardeathexperiences.com/2009/03/every-time-you-undress-me/comment-page-1/#comment-120 David Wright Tue, 17 Mar 2009 01:55:10 +0000 http://13neardeathexperiences.com/?p=246#comment-120 I really like this one. Very nice melody and elegant words. It seemed to end, not abruptly per se, but before I was expecting it to. I think I was unconsciously expecting a final repeat of the chorus. Just a comment on pop music conditioning! I noticed that the flute and violin motives are displaced freely around the measure, but the piano's A-E-D fifths (the harmonic progression) are always on the half-note beats. ("What Will It Be For Me?" is somewhat similar.) Is that deliberate? Again, not saying you should change it here, but it might be a variable you could consciously play with (displacing the "chord progression" chords from the harmonic movement/rhythm) in another song, if you want. <b>Corey replies:</b> <i>Thanks, David. I'm glad you like this one. There are similarities (deliberately) between this song and "What Will It Be for Me?" I like your idea about displacing the chords in the piano part. I might try that and see what happens.</i> I really like this one. Very nice melody and elegant words.

It seemed to end, not abruptly per se, but before I was expecting it to. I think I was unconsciously expecting a final repeat of the chorus. Just a comment on pop music conditioning!

I noticed that the flute and violin motives are displaced freely around the measure, but the piano’s A-E-D fifths (the harmonic progression) are always on the half-note beats. (”What Will It Be For Me?” is somewhat similar.) Is that deliberate? Again, not saying you should change it here, but it might be a variable you could consciously play with (displacing the “chord progression” chords from the harmonic movement/rhythm) in another song, if you want.

Corey replies: Thanks, David. I’m glad you like this one. There are similarities (deliberately) between this song and “What Will It Be for Me?” I like your idea about displacing the chords in the piano part. I might try that and see what happens.

]]> By: Keely http://13neardeathexperiences.com/2009/03/every-time-you-undress-me/comment-page-1/#comment-105 Keely Fri, 13 Mar 2009 18:11:37 +0000 http://13neardeathexperiences.com/?p=246#comment-105 Lovely as always, Corey. Listening, I really wanted the tempo to pick up at the second chorus, and for the drums to come in really strong and consistently at that point. I realize that would significantly change the song, so take it as you will. Also, I particularly love the violin in this piece. <b>Corey replies:</b> <i>Thanks, Keely. I think the drum part needs to be more fleshed out. Right now it's just a skeleton of what I imagine the drum part will eventually become. Maybe a tempo change would be a good idea, but since the song is divided into three parts, that might make for too lopsided a structure. But it's worth a try...</i> <b>Corey amends his reply:</b> <i>My dunderheaded response about lopsidedness totally missed that you wanted the tempo to pick up exactly halfway through the song! Oops.</i> Lovely as always, Corey. Listening, I really wanted the tempo to pick up at the second chorus, and for the drums to come in really strong and consistently at that point. I realize that would significantly change the song, so take it as you will.

Also, I particularly love the violin in this piece.

Corey replies: Thanks, Keely. I think the drum part needs to be more fleshed out. Right now it’s just a skeleton of what I imagine the drum part will eventually become. Maybe a tempo change would be a good idea, but since the song is divided into three parts, that might make for too lopsided a structure. But it’s worth a try…

Corey amends his reply: My dunderheaded response about lopsidedness totally missed that you wanted the tempo to pick up exactly halfway through the song! Oops.

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